Ali,+Aasim


 * Round 1: Blaize DePass: **Julia/Cecelia vs Nisarg/Aasim

EVERYONE—IMPACTS, IMPACTS, IMPACTS. You gotta explain the impacts of the arguments you all are making and pit them against each other. I want to know what I am voting for and why voting for you is better than voting for them. The other thing is CX. You need to try and garner offense or links so that you have more weight to your arguments in the actual speeches. There also needs to be a lot more communication between the partners so that everyone can be on the same page. If you want something extended, tell your partner so that there isn’t confusion between you all which could cost you the debate. Also, you all need to take your arguments a step further, and explain the WHY’s and HOW’s of your arguments. You get to the base level, but make sure to take it a step further.

Aasim (2NC)—I think you are doing a little too much tagline extending. Yes they dropped solvency but explain more why this frames the debate in context of voting neg. You gotta have reasons to vote and not solely reasons to NOT vote, even if u have only reasons not to vote they have to be more developed. Do some more explanation. I like most of your disad work, but the framing stuff at the bottom should be put on case or made in context of the disad impact.

Aasim (2NR)—this was alright, but you gotta do some more explaining on the cp solvency in a world where this is what you’re going for. I want a more developed story if you’re going to argue that you solve the aff better. You need to compare the two mechanisms and explain the differences. I understand what the argument is, but more explanation is definitely necessary.




 * Round 5: Blaize DePass:** Max vs Nisarg/Aasim

Aasim (2NC)—Great 2NC. You're making smart arguments and i think you do it very efficiently. You definitely can be spending more time doing some impact comparison, but i like what you did in this speech. Work on variating your voice when moving from an argument to another, but besides that, this speech hit most of the major points it seemed to have needed.


 * Round 6: Blaize DePass:** Aasim/Nisarg vs Noah/Sam

Aasim (1AC)--The 1AC was good. I like how its framed. Work a little on delivery for the rap portion so it flows a little clearer. I think that you have good arguments coming out of the 1AC, just make sure you are using them more to your advantage in the cx.

Aasim (1AR)--I think this speech was okay, but there were problems with argument choice and where you put some of your arguments. I think that topicality is moot at this point, if you are going for the argument you go for you need to spend time on it. I think you also don't get to cap with enough time. You are really focused on this case stuff but i think alot of these arguments can be made on the cap flow and not the case flow so that you can garner offense on their only viable 2NR option. The arguments you made were fine, i just think you have to work on structuring it to your advantage.

6-30: Aasim—you should press the link more in cx. 1ar—you need to be more efficient on case—extend the most important offense and move on. Your offcase responses are too defensive. you need to be sure that you're anticipating 2nr offense and extending responses to that.

Nisarg and Aasim—I think that you should characterize your non-English speaking during prep as part of your performance.


 * Round 8: Blaize DePass:** Alex/Derek vs Aasim

1NC--This was fine. It was time efficient. Do some more speaking drills and you will sound even more seamless.

2NC--I think you need an overview to the kritik as opposed to just going on cards right from the get-go. I don't think reading 5 minutes of cards is the way to go. I think you want to be answering their arguments a lot more explicity. I realize this can be difficult to be extra efficient while mav, but i know you could do it. I think you got to all the main points you needed to but things like impact comparison and overviews are important for this speech, particularly on the K.

1NR--This is obviously a hard speech to prepare for when you're mav, but i think you did a goo job handling it. I would've liked to see a little more analysis of their arguments and some more imapct work on the disad, but besides that this was a fine speech. You should maybe extend T with the small amount of time you have left just to make his life harder in the 1AR.

2NR--I think you want to do more work in the block so that you have more viable options in the 2NR. At this point in the debate you are kind of bogged down because not a lot of work was done on the disad in the 1NR but they did a lot of work on the k so you're in a hard position. I think it's all spin at this point and you want to make sure you are doing impact work and you should be good.

7-2: Nisarg and Aasim—I think that there’s a significant contradiction between your 1nc poem and your 2nc args about speaking for others—the poem includes a really emotional account of parents whose kids experience state violence and you’re clearly not that. You guys also need to develop the model minority stuff more thoroughly.

Aasim—I know that you can’t read cards on it, but you need to give better explanations on speaking for others.

Generally everyone needs to work on clash—the debate feels like it’s all about how neither side does anything for the other side, so it comes down to this “me first” framework without warrants for why I should vote for Ann the yellow pirate or Aasim and Nisarg the terrorists first. If Ann doesn’t think we need to blow up debate, how does the counteradvocacy make space for her to be a pirate? And if Aasim and Nisarg think that we definitely do need to blow it up, how does making Ann a pirate move them out of the state of exception?